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|  | Men of the East
« Thread Started on Feb 9, 2004, 1:20pm » | |
I finally read the second part of your story Mariner and rather liked it, got some good character developement going. I really liked how you told Amicus's past through his blacking out, nice touch. The only thing I did notice though, that in the first sentance of the story, the orc ship is called Demon's Breath, yet in the sentance of it's destruction, it's called Dragon's Breath. Now I'm off to read part three...Hope everyone else puts their thoughts about the stories too.
Talk to you later, Ti'ana
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He Should Not Vow To Walk In The Darkness, Who Has Not Seen Nightfall...
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| | Re: Men of the East
« Reply #1 on Feb 18, 2004, 8:27pm » | |
Just realized I never said anything 'bout part three! I thought it was really good. Enviroment was described really well and emotion displayed nicely. Seems like your beginning to open up the culture more as well and its looking good. Keep going!
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